Sunday, June 9, 2013

Tagged: WIP Snippet-sharing

Fun new game!  Kip Wilson Rechea  aka Kiperoo tagged me in a snippet-sharing blog post. Check out hers here  Definitely makes me curious to read more!

I’m sharing a snippet from my contemporary YA thriller, Devil’s Orchid. The rules were: “Search the words “moment,” “forever,” “time,” or the like in your writing, pick your favorite chunk, post on your blog, and tag others!” I opted for “moment,” but it was a lot of fun looking for all three words.

For a long moment we hunch there, gulping air. The smoke isn’t wafting out anymore, but the smell hangs in the air and clings to the inside of my nose. My hair sticks to my fingers as I push it back from my sweaty face.  Quincy’s cradling his bad arm.

“What happened?" I ask.

He lets go of his arm. “I’m not sure. I was digging around in the pantry. The door slammed shut. There was banging, then smoke.”

“Was it Colt?”

“I don’t know. When I got here, I opened the kitchen window and lit a candle to get rid of the raccoon stink. A gust of wind probably blew the door shut and knocked the candle over.” He takes his hat off and starts scrunching and scrunching it like he’s struggling to keep his anger in check. His voice is a million kinds of raspy.

I toughen my voice. “Don’t treat me like I’m an idiot. You saw him, didn’t you?” 

That’s it! I’m tagging my agent-mates ( kind of like litter mates, I guess ;) )

DebbieCass, and Katherine   Can’t wait to see a moment in your manuscripts!


  1. Aaaah, can't wait to read the whole thing!!

  2. I was hoping you'd say that. Soon, my pretty, very soon :)

  3. I love the part where he's scrunching and scrunching his hat(I never realiezed b4 what a fun word that is!) and where you describe his voice as a million kinds of raspy. Perfecto! =)

  4. Thanks. I love scrunching too. Well, I love fun verbs in general.

  5. That was quite thrilling, very creeptastic. Thanks for sharing!

  6. Thank you for stopping by. One of my goals for this round of revision is to raise the story's creeptasticness--so you've made me happy.

  7. Hahaha! I've read the whole thing *sticks out tongue*

    And it's ALL this good!

  8. *blushes* But I think Kip's going to be luckier than you. You got to see the stinky cheese naked draft :)

  9. Great snippet, Patty! Can't wait to read it! Keep it going! :)

  10. I'm a little over halfway done with revisions. Once end of the school year things are done at work, I'm hoping to move forward even faster. I'll let you know when it's ready for eyes.