Fun new game! Kip Wilson Rechea aka Kiperoo tagged me in a snippet-sharing blog post. Check out hers here Definitely makes me curious to read more!
I’m sharing a snippet from my contemporary YA thriller, Devil’s Orchid. The rules were: “Search the words “moment,” “forever,” “time,” or the like in your writing, pick your favorite chunk, post on your blog, and tag others!” I opted for “moment,” but it was a lot of fun looking for all three words.
For a long moment we hunch there, gulping
air. The smoke isn’t wafting out anymore, but the smell hangs in the air and
clings to the inside of my nose. My hair sticks to my fingers as I push it back
from my sweaty face. Quincy’s cradling
his bad arm.
“What happened?" I ask.
He lets go of his arm. “I’m not sure. I was
digging around in the pantry. The door slammed shut. There was banging, then
smoke.”
“Was it Colt?”
“I don’t know. When I got here, I opened the
kitchen window and lit a candle to get rid of the raccoon stink. A gust of wind
probably blew the door shut and knocked the candle over.” He takes his hat off
and starts scrunching and scrunching it like he’s struggling to keep his anger
in check. His voice is a million kinds of raspy.
I toughen my voice. “Don’t treat me like I’m
an idiot. You saw him, didn’t you?”
Debbie, Cass, and Katherine Can’t wait to see a moment in your manuscripts!
Aaaah, can't wait to read the whole thing!!
ReplyDeleteI was hoping you'd say that. Soon, my pretty, very soon :)
ReplyDeleteI love the part where he's scrunching and scrunching his hat(I never realiezed b4 what a fun word that is!) and where you describe his voice as a million kinds of raspy. Perfecto! =)
ReplyDeleteThanks. I love scrunching too. Well, I love fun verbs in general.
ReplyDeleteThat was quite thrilling, very creeptastic. Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteThank you for stopping by. One of my goals for this round of revision is to raise the story's creeptasticness--so you've made me happy.
ReplyDeleteHahaha! I've read the whole thing *sticks out tongue*
ReplyDeleteAnd it's ALL this good!
*blushes* But I think Kip's going to be luckier than you. You got to see the stinky cheese naked draft :)
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet, Patty! Can't wait to read it! Keep it going! :)
ReplyDeleteI'm a little over halfway done with revisions. Once end of the school year things are done at work, I'm hoping to move forward even faster. I'll let you know when it's ready for eyes.
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